While I can appreciate occasional use of sentence fragments for the sake of emphasis and stylistic choice, in this piece I found it to be overused and difficult to read. In addition, there are many typos; misspelled words, compound words that should be hyphenated and are not, etc. The amount of editing required for this piece is simply beyond the scope of this particular project.
So I'm biased. I happen to be friends with the writer who received this rejection letter. But bias or not, trust me, we're talking about a professional, multi-published, extremely talented author who is one of my favorite smut writers. Ever. I also understand that there are different schools of thought on rejection. Some editors write long, thoughtful letters. Others are more concise. (Mine tend to be along the lines of: "I liked your story a lot, but the piece just didn't work for my collection this time around.") But I would never, ever, fucking ever send this to a writer.
And let me tell you something else — the editor who wrote this bitch slap has far fewer credentials than the one who did the submitting.
I'm. Just. Shaking. My. Head.
Girl scout cookie, anyone?
I need to wash the bitter out of my mouth.